Week 2 Story The Clumsy Monkey
The Clumsy Monkey
One day, two monkeys were playing in the forest. They were wandering around and jumping from tree to tree. They came up with the idea to play tag and began to do just that. As they were running around and swinging from trees, one of the monkeys hit his head on a coconut. You can probably guess that this was the clumsy monkey. No damage was done to the monkey, and in fact, it inspired them to play a new game.
The monkeys came up with the idea to play catch with the coconut. They were having a lot of fun playing catch until the clumsy monkey struck again. The coconut was thrown to him and he tried to catch it like O'Dell Beckham and it fell about sixty feet down from the trees and hit the ground. Once it hit the ground, it made a huge BANG!
Below the trees there were many animals socializing, drinking water, and chatting amongst themselves. All of the sudden, this loud noise hits and causes a mass panic. There was a rabbit and a lion, a deer and a wolf, and a bear. All of these animals panicked and ran for their lives. This made the monkeys laugh and they immediately took off after the animals to watch the mayhem. Animals were jumping on each others backs, running over each other, and diving for cover. This continued for a long time until, finally, the animals got tired and reached a point of "safety." Once the animals stopped running, the monkeys explained the situation and the one that dropped it was forever made fun of by the other monkey. Both monkeys made fun of how scared the other animals were and they all mad at the monkeys.
In the end, the animals all laughed it off and continued their daily lives.
Hello Robbie! This was such a cute story. I enjoyed reading it. You really followed through with your inspiration from the Timid Rabbit. The ending was so simple, yet it was kept on a good note. the monkeys playing coconuts were such an adorable characters for you to pick out. I liked that none of the animals were mad and they just continued on. You did an excellent job giving more in depth background than the original story.
ReplyDeleteHey Robbie,
ReplyDeleteIt was a good story that I got to read here. I like that you continued through your story from the point of view after the monkey dropped the coconut. It was very creative. The chatting and socializing of other animal around gave the story and sense of realistic. I really like the fact that you brought the human characteristic among the animals in the story and make them life-like: O'dell Beckham catches.
I am confused a little bit from your story although it only surrounded two monkeys, but I was not able to identify which monkey after reading a little bit more into the story. I think that you can give the monkey some names, so that we can identify them easier.
I wonder what would happen if the clumsy monkey fell onto one of the animal and hurt them. I think that would be an interesting way to tell your story as well. Anyway, great story, Robbie
Hi Robbie!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your story! I thought that it was very fun and cute. I always love stories where animals are the main characters because I think it adds child-like charm and makes it feel like a sweet little fable. I also really liked how your story was kinda of comical, like when you mentioned O'dell Beckham and used the "BANG!" sound effect. Ultimately, this was really fun and enjoyable to read! Good job!